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    dots Submission Name: in my secret bodydots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsin my secret bodydots
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    pick a cloud,
    there're three inside your eyes;
    & too many sidewalks to fill a night,
    but the broken moon
    with all its busted clocks
    & clever looks
    can never return you
    to the inner child.

    the walls are shinier
    on the other side;
    old highways and new trails
    through an ancient lake.
    the heart,
    with a tongue of its own
    speaks in circles;
    love makes you dizzy
    & you end up on the ground.

    i keep blades of grass
    in my back pockets
    to cut through the memories;
    shadows are like dead relatives,
    friends i've lost along the way
    & the strangers i've met in passing
    that i'll never see again.
    i keep them all like coin collectors
    hoarding stamps and rings.

    each love affair is a different life;
    every parting of the lips a reminder
    of how many times i've died,
    lived again & started it all over.
    the parts of me that are missing
    make me whole.
    i take deep breaths when i'm remembering,
    then tuck my eyes into my dreams
    & let go.

    in my secret body,
    i am both always & never
    alone...




    Submitted on 2010-09-25 14:30:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't know if I understood all of it, but some of the different images brought up really caught my eye and made me think of the way the brain jumps around from one image to the next smell when trying to remember something.
    I enjoyed reading, thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2010-10-03 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      the parts of me that are missing
    make me whole... My favorite line.
    I really liked the metaphor's they were new and made me think.
    Kudo's
    | Posted on 2010-09-25 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]


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