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    dots Submission Name: Self Destructive Tendencies: Questionsdots

    Author: lechuga
    ASL Info:    16\M\NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 7/15/27
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsSelf Destructive Tendencies: Questionsdots

    Do you imagine me throughout the day?
    I imagine you throughout the day.
    Do you see the way my fingers splay?
    -Ripping out hair while I decay
    -Begging you, but you can't, stay
    Do you see the way that my thighs sway?
    Walking through hallways, head down, ache-
    Muscle indents, the quivering fingers digging when I bake-
    Would it be all too much to take?
    -Watching my spine bend and shake.
    -Writhing under blemished flesh, my make
    Do you see my boney toes?
    Do you see my ribs?
    Do you see the way I fumble, God?
    Are you watching me give in?
    I would break you in a heartbeat,
    but I'll break me in your stead.

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