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    dots Submission Name: Journey to the Moondots

    Author: iluvpoetry_1
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    dotsJourney to the Moondots

    I don't want to view the world as an object in the sky that has been engulfed by the darkness. I want to believe that somewhere there is a golden light that swallows all my fear and pain.

    Though I don't know where I am going
    I am destined for greatness and I am
    a star... una estrella .

    By the end of this journey my heart will be on the moon.
    I just pray that my time won't come too soon
    Because this void in my heart will be restored

    And I will finally be at peace.
    Maybe it is that time where I truly let my light shine.
    I have finally made up my mind for the last time.

    All my dreams that I crave at night
    Are now no longer a might
    But reality and despite the fact

    Of what you might think
    I will shoot for the moon
    And the stars will only be a resting place.....


    Submitted on 2010-09-28 10:33:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
    Interesting theme with the moon and all. Very interesting poem itself. The 'story' behind it is really well thought out too.
    I really liked the line: "I will shoot for the moon and the stars will only be a resting place..." it indicates a sense of striving so that really finishes it off well.
    It is a really wonderful poem, but I must admit, some of the rhyme and ryhthm did confuse me; like in the fourth stanza, the first two verses I felt were a bit inconsistent... but otherwise, I really enjoyed reading this poem and the story behind it. (:
    | Posted on 2010-10-14 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]

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