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    dots Submission Name: A Moment of Eternitydots

    Author: Joachim
    ASL Info:    75 Male RSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 361/264/178
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 770
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       This I have reworked a bit. Dedicated to my loving wife.jm

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsA Moment of Eternitydots

    A Moment of Eternity

    Overcome with nostalgia
    One second did it last?
    Past to Future
    Bitter to Sweet
    My Sorrow did not Last.

    Scythe Blue cold and Grey
    Miserable and Blues
    Another day is missing you.

    Golden dawn another day.

    Sekel-blou en grou
    breek die oggend-son deur die skemer dou.
    Trietserig en grynsend bleek
    nog `n dag sonder jou.

    Sy Liefde is Getrou.


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      Aai Oom Joppie, dis so mooi. Sit n groot man hier met n knop in die keel en ek kan skaars die skerm sien.

    Ek weet nie eers want om te se nie, want daar is nie woorde nie. Maar ek kan elke woord voel, in n baie spesiale plek in my hart, en dis seker wat saak maak.


    | Posted on 2011-07-17 00:00:00 | by TiaanK | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. What language is that at the end? It sounds to me like Belgian or something. Would you care to translate it?
    | Posted on 2011-07-08 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      sorry this one kind of lost me after "another day is missing you" which i found powerful..."rp."

    hung there unnecessarily it seemed...

    but up to that point i felt this gaining so much momentum....

    the last part looks interesting...but to somone unfamiliar to the language..the poem ends in the middle...

    sadly...because i was riding the current...and wanting to keep my editing paddle in the canoe.
    | Posted on 2011-03-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Eternal is uncertain, except for a glimpse. Yet even a glimpse passes for more than faith. And so we speak of our joy as being most precious and therefore golden, while we think of dawn as but a beginning.

    Therein lies true treasure. We share the sorrow of loss even while we realize that it was first born and continues in love.

    This work cycles well from loss and grief to acceptance and ultimate joy, never quite fully letting go which is how it should be. Would it be trite of me to say how wise it is?
    | Posted on 2010-10-04 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      it was short and sweet...though i did not understand the end part but other wise it was good
    my condolences~kacie
    | Posted on 2010-09-30 00:00:00 | by taintedsmiles | [ Reply to This ]

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