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    dots Submission Name: Foolish dreamsdots

    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsFoolish dreamsdots

    I am sinking into my chest;
    hurting with pain,
    you can't see...
    Praying to god you can hear me scream,
    deep iside these walls:
    of my mind...
    Can you feel me?
    Can you taste these tears,
    buring my eyes?
    I want you to notice-
    that I am hurting.
    Can you find me,
    inside my maze of misery?
    Or, am I too lost in myself?
    I am thirsty for acceptance and want,
    you to hold me close...
    When I clench myself,
    in fear of embrace...
    I pray to a god;
    knowing very well,
    no one is listening...
    But I still fall to my knees;
    pound my fists to the ground-
    praying harder...
    That if I stand close to you-
    you'd feel me hurting...
    That you would just know,
    what I need-
    is just some compassion.
    I pray with these tears falling free,
    from my body.
    I pray on tattered, raw knees;
    that I can stand here staring,
    and you can just-
    FEEL me,
    in need...
    But I know with dismay in my heart,
    that these-
    are foolish dreams.

    Submitted on 2010-09-30 14:51:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am an atheist but some of my poems are prayers. This one looks like that!

    Your self-expression is very direct and makes a powerful poem ... the sort of poem I don't want to criticize but just tell you I understood it and want to send what is asked for!

    I used to think that a cry from the heart is not quite art; but I'm getting an education from poets on this website! Was glad to read your postings.
    | Posted on 2010-10-01 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]

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