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    dots Submission Name: Unfinished Breakingdots
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    Author: stefhy
    ASL Info:    21/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 165/83/37
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 677
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1699



    Description:
       It's not done. It's more of a free write, lyrics... When I get a guitar, I will write it better to rhythm... For now it's just crisp feeling. And quite literally unfinished.


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    dotsUnfinished Breakingdots
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    The words you say, the tangle of your mind
    it's confusing all the logic in mine.
    I guess love isn't stitched without the needle,
    nothing's built without time
    A muscle is built stronger through pain
    But you're wearing this old heart away.

    We've used our tears before,
    to paint over the cracks
    but it's broken my love, it's broken.
    We can't sleep this one away,
    We keep waking up to the same day
    You beg me to stay, but you start to stray
    It's broken my love, it's broken.

    Your voice sounds like hers sometimes,
    your eyes turn hazel. Green. Blue.
    The man with my heart, doesn't look like you
    My blood on your hands,
    My tricks up your sleeve
    You're squeezing my heart, but it still keeps its beat
    My name on your lips, you know me too well
    I'll forget myself if I walk away now.

    We've used our tears before,
    to paint over the cracks.
    We're broken my love, we're broken.
    There's no sleeping until it fades,
    The damage can't be changed
    I'll beg you to stay, and then start to stray
    We're broken my love, we're broken.

    Memories we wrote in pen,
    That once helped draw the smile
    The ink was cried away, was any of it worth while?
    Drink to things that we recall,
    And clink our glasses before the fall
    This time I fear,
    The end has come near.
    And we must end it all.
    I'm too broken, my love. We're all broken.




    Submitted on 2010-10-01 18:22:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like this as a song or a poem...

    especially like the second verse...
    "we can't sleep this one away"

    usually things look better in the morning...but this problem needs to be solved before we go to bed....

    strong sentiment and such ease of delivery...reading you is a joy!

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      DAYUM. This is amazing! (even if it is unfinished) It has great rhythm, and a great rhyme scheme, and it touches my heart. I love your words! Sorry for the short comment, hon. Keep up the great work Peace and inspiration!

    Duv
    | Posted on 2010-10-02 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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