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    dots Submission Name: Confessiondots

    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    Oh, I got a confession to make,
    I'm always scared she'll take you away
    No, I'm not testing your faith
    Just wondering if I'm worth the wait

    Oh, she's tenfold much better than me
    And way more prettier, can't you see?
    It's a notion that won't let me be
    So won't you come and set me free?

    Oh, I feel so stupid writing this
    Because when I am with you it is heavenly bliss
    It was you that I would dearly miss
    Well, that was before I saw you two kiss.

    Submitted on 2010-10-02 02:10:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ok, you know that vibe that goes through you after you read something super depressing or just freaking sad? I got that vibe so hard when I read "Well, that was before I saw you two kiss."

    I'm serious, this hit me hard since I actually went through that. :/
    | Posted on 2011-01-13 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a rocky heartbreak.The third and final stanza kinda describes you walking in on something that just crushed your world and ripped you apart.The last line I mean.You were not protected by this person.Which to me seems like the exact same person your referring to in "Why are you doing this to?" And heres another thing Esh.Don't feel stupid writing about anything that you feel your feelings are screaming out at bc you may triumph over them for expressing and you'll rob yourself of feeling at least a little better about WHO YOU ARE more than who you and this person were together.What I don't like about is that it's almost like your saying your not beautiful.I totally disagree bc you had enough strength to come out on end with this so it's beautiful of you to take your painful, [censored]ed up predicament based on someone elses huge mistake and even put it into a confession.This person must have been slipping away from you and were happy of doing so.At times we tend to do things to a loved one and not know of it or the amount of hurt it embarks on them.I do not know if this is the case but this person could have been hurt by you without telling you and decided to make other arrangements of a whole different relationship leaving you all alone.Which [censored] sux bc noone deserves it really.And based on me meeting you as a human being, you didn't.But then again I don't understand the full magnitude of the relationship you had with this guy.It's obvious you won't or wouldn't get over it as fast bc if so you wouldn't have took the time out to display the feelings that are here.The confession here to me is that you felt at the time you would have been alone and somewhat weak without him.Which is typical for any serious relationship with someone all bc of the attachment to that person.Just bc she as your sloppy seconds does not make her better than you.Even tho this person did the ultimate no no towards you it kinda amazes me how strong you really are as a human being.Bc look at it this way you could have written angry lines ravaging towards him but you did not.I could see that with the line

    "It was you that I would dearly miss"
    Which is of the past before the moment of a hellish truth was unfolded.
    Esh just let time heal your wounds.*Hugs* Bye I hope my thoughts help a little.

    | Posted on 2010-10-20 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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