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    dots Submission Name: Alibisdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 336
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    As though sleeping upon the billboards of our dreams
    The afflicted eye incandescent
    Holds its purgatory of questions

    We were taught them in our classrooms
    With more chalk and silent blackboards
    As though written in acceptance
    Children who would believe in anything

    Injustice was made easy
    By the acquirement's of money
    To dowse the soul in saccharin
    And keep us sleeping in the billboards of our dreams

    And when the taste of metal
    Chews at every inch of fat
    We lay anguished in the puppet show of everything we wish to forget

    In this fast food explodes the bombs and blood
    Death of children a new soap opera
    Stabbing bile within out hearts
    Takes more addiction to someone’s drug in order to achieve denial

    Then meanwhile on the billboards
    Writes the means to this survival
    Fabricated in excuses pulchritude
    Hangs the noose so willingly placed about our necks

    And we, we are just dreaming
    The billboards incessant yammering
    Hacks every question from our eyes

    Although we do not feel it, we are choking in our comfort
    We are drowning in the lack of food
    We are burning in apparent freedom
    We are dieing from the inside out

    Slapped over the mouth of conscience goes another bloody burger
    Another tasteless plate of fries
    One more look from those desperate eyes
    One more sachet of couldn’t care less

    Paste the peanut butter up on billboard dreams
    With quick subliminal sentiments
    They’re a million miles away, it seems

    It wasn’t me, I wasn’t there, I didn’t have the time to care
    They told me I had to stop this happening to my children to
    Another pill to calm my nerves
    Life is so good it’s like a commercial advert
    Though I toss and turn late at night
    And something inside me always fights
    Unseen within bile of my heart
    Takes more addiction to this drug in order to achieve denial

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      I agree with TheStillSilence. This was quite fantastic! :]
    | Posted on 2010-10-06 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      This was fantastic! I really loved the idea behind it, and it was executed perfectly!

    The comparison of the "sheeple-ness" of people to the commodities of our every lives that add onto it worked very well!

    This was my favorite stanza:

    Although we do not feel it, we are choking in our comfort
    We are drowning in the lack of food
    We are burning in apparent freedom
    We are dieing from the inside out

    Oxymorons work perfectly in this type of piece!

    Great job!
    | Posted on 2010-10-05 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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