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    dots Submission Name: awaydots
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    Author: alyssajl
    Elite Ratio:    0.56 - 1/3/26
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       about when i ran away and was taken back home from people we call saviors. the police....


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    I told no one but the one i was leaving with.
    I climbed out the window and ran.
    Ran for happiness.
    The day i ran away was the happiest day of my life.
    Pure bliss.
    However, she saw it coming.
    I told her I'd call home after a while.
    What a complete lie.
    I will not call home.
    I am happy away from all you treacherous people.
    But no.
    I was taken home but the people some of us call "saviors."
    Back to the hell i now refuse to call home.
    I wait for the day i have the heart to leave again.
    But I'd be leaving for myself.
    Pursuit of happiness right?
    How selfish I am....




    Submitted on 2010-10-04 16:40:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think its good!
    [: Awesomeness, not selfish.
    | Posted on 2010-10-07 00:00:00 | by RhymeSwaqq | [ Reply to This ]
      i think that was very selfish thing to do and i think that why we have meaness in this world
    | Posted on 2010-10-07 00:00:00 | by angelagresham19 | [ Reply to This ]


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