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    dots Submission Name: Guilt dots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsGuilt dots
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    With incentive at the door-
    Icy-layered knocks revered in spite
    A malicious pounding with false reverberations
    Yet the air stands still
    as if in defiance.

    Enticing the tremors and chills-
    if the hair on the back of your neck had enough force,
    They would pull you away
    on puppet strings bound by steel wires
    Yet your body is fixated on normal
    as if in defiance.

    The windowpane flutters slightly,
    and you shrink back
    into welcoming corners with semi-soft edges
    Sneaking peaks, but humidity is high
    with no winds in sight
    as if in defiance.

    The daylight tiptoes into night
    and the night crawls into dusk
    You let your shoulders fall,
    with curiosity only a thought away
    but your mind draws a blank-
    as if in defiance.

    First your finger, then your hand, your arms and your pelvis-
    You've lost sensation but your mind draws blank
    You're loosing quickly, but your mind draws blank
    as if in defiance
    But
    You loose.

    The tremors in the air reach your neck.
    The puppet strings rise.
    Your breathing resumes.
    Your thoughts run away.
    There's no more defiance.

    You linger for a second, then return back inside, again shutting the door,
    but it has no inertia, no momentum-
    this time in guilt.




    Submitted on 2010-10-05 18:29:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      so much depression in the newer poems... i loved this poem though... try bringing more happyness to the world, we dont have enough of it any more:'(
    | Posted on 2011-03-22 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]
      This is definitely interesting. Keep writing! :]
    | Posted on 2010-10-06 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]


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