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    dots Submission Name: Humbled Gracedots

    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 25/66/50
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       For my husband, who never gave up, although sometimes I'm not entirely sure why.

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    dotsHumbled Gracedots

    You saved me,
    from eating myself
    over and over.

    You lifted my head
    I was sure to fail

    My name never sounded
    so elegant than when it
    tumbles from your

    My heart thawed,
    my ice brick wall
    under you.

    My world changed,
    my life disassembled
    and you placed it so gently
    into it's perfect sequence.

    And I think you for going further
    than any other, and not
    letting go
    of me.

    Through stubborn nights,
    unthoughtful gestures,
    sour words and
    my little blue bag.

    I think I knew that the arms
    of that stranger would become
    the arms of my lover, when I turned and
    whispered, "hot truck."

    Submitted on 2010-10-07 08:11:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A very interesting poem here... the last line left me smiling broadly, no question about that!! michael
    | Posted on 2010-10-11 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't really get the ending,, but thats ok because i really liked the rest of it. ive felt that way before, were i felt my life had been saved by someone i love. good write!
    | Posted on 2010-10-08 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]

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