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    dots Submission Name: Thirteendots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1076
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsThirteendots
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    I thought, I thought, thought,
    I was really, really over you,
    Til this day,
    I guess the haze will never become unglued,
    Your like a tattoo,
    Not only can I not get rid of you,
    I really truly don’t want too.

    I've been here since before 13,
    I'm 21 now,
    Nothing has changed,
    Only grown,
    I have your back,
    Why can't you see that?

    When you walked on me,
    Treated me worse than a matt,
    Babe, I'll always come back,

    I wish you could see
    What's right in front of you
    I'm always here
    Have always been
    Don’t plan on leaving
    Just open up your eyes
    && really see me




    Submitted on 2010-10-07 13:58:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      my eyes are open! this is sweet like an Arvill song. it also smacks of hurry post this! as the following corrections point out- your ; you are
    dont want too ; want to
    matt; mat
    dont worry your head about the corrections it happens to everybody- even nobel laurettes just that being an authority certain aspects of editing is waivered. lol
    its true again & again simple worded pieces are more fun to read and easier to imagine. hint: errors easy2see
    | Posted on 2010-10-13 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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