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    dots Submission Name: When Did A Saint Become A Melancholy Wraithdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 75/186/232
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    A knock on the door, cold entered the room.
    A shiver down the spine, cold despite the fireplace.
    A sun depraved flower, cold from withering to waste.

    I could only remember that all I wanted to do was protect her from death's constant gardening.
    I whispered her everything would be alright; I thought so at least...

    Scarlet droplets signaled for her to leave, porcelain white the tea cups do speak. - Believe
    On this, the second day I watched as death watched through the frost covered windowpane, shaking his finger in a mocking way.

    A jump? Why did I jump as the candle relaxed and coasted into the breeze, perhaps to rest for a while...
    A pain in my face, watching and waiting for her last breath to take.
    A silence unlike any I've experienced, it was so loud, roaring like absolute isolation.

    I once spoke to her in positive gestures, now I find here upon the third day my patience has begun to dissipate.
    I whispered to her, please take God's hand and be eternally saved.





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