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    dots Submission Name: My Tears Tell A Storydots
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    Author: RhymeSwaqq
    Elite Ratio:    0.95 - 3/2/2
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsMy Tears Tell A Storydots
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    My tears tell a story,
    Of a 14-year-old girl,
    Filled with anger for the world.

    Day and night,
    She wept and she wept.
    That was the cause of all the secrets
    she kept.

    She cried with such sorrow,
    That she cried while she slept.

    She held on to so many memories inside,
    That her sadness could no longer hide.

    She searches and searches for a way out,
    She wonders if people care.
    But in her heart there is doubt.

    All that damage from little lies.
    How cruel, How hateful.

    Waterfalls run down her neck and to her thighs.
    Will Anyone dare to answer her crys?

    My Tears tell a story.




    Submitted on 2010-10-07 21:39:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it it was very good
    please cheak out mine
    | Posted on 2010-10-08 00:00:00 | by angelagresham19 | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it except for the minor error. Second to last line. "crys" should be "cries"

    But it was still great. 5 of 5
    | Posted on 2010-10-07 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]


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