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    dots Submission Name: Vowsdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 545
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1441



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    If I were like the rain is,
    And you were like the Earth,
    My storms would cease to frighten,
    My lightning enlighten,
    And golden as the grain is
    Would be your stellar worth.
    If I were like the rain is,
    And you were like the Earth.

    If each star now a pearl is,
    Your throat I would festoon,
    And use all precious metals
    Gemstones and red rose petals,
    For me no other girl is
    As pure before the moon.
    If each star now a pearl is,
    Your throat I would festoon.

    Sometimes your silver tear is
    A jewel that I enfold.
    Your kiss so like a potion
    Of love to fill an ocean,
    I know your heart, and here is
    Pure love more fine than gold.
    Sometimes your silver tear is
    A jewel that I enfold.

    You beauty now unfurled is,
    Your huge eyes rage and storm,
    As arm in arm we measure
    The hours of our pleasure,
    A fief now all the world is,
    When each our kisses warm.
    You beauty now unfurled is,
    Your huge eyes rage and storm.

    If I were like the rain is,
    And you were like the Earth,
    My storms would cease to frighten,
    My lightning enlighten,
    And golden as the grain is
    Would be your stellar worth.
    If I were like the rain is,
    And you were like the Earth.




    Submitted on 2010-10-09 19:14:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      WOW. Just beautiful, brilliant use of vocabulary and perfect binding of words!!! This is amazing, I look forward to reading more of your work.!! Brilliant!
    | Posted on 2010-10-10 00:00:00 | by cherrywillow | [ Reply to This ]
      Outstanding! This is perfectly and masterfully done. It is delightful to read, and I believe you have mastered what appears to be a difficult poetic format.
    | Posted on 2010-10-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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