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    dots Submission Name: The Worst Part Of It Alldots
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    Author: EileenToTheLeft
    ASL Info:    28/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 16/36/55
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Worst Part Of It Alldots
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    I climbed to the top of a tree.
    Some limbs weren't old enough yet
    to bear the weight of me and
    they bent as I stepped, while
    others held up just fine.
    Down at the bottom, the beast
    breathing, bleeding, wielding
    a weapon, as if that was needed.
    He stared up into my pallid face,
    though, I cannot remember his.
    And I said nothing.
    In shock, or terror, or
    just frozen in some belief
    that maybe, just maybe
    I was mistaken. Still hidden
    and he would tromp off in search
    of some other prey.
    But, how long could I
    expect to be so lucky?
    How long would the rest of the world
    fall and I remain
    without hardly fighting?
    So, approaching the trunk,
    he pushed and pulled to
    bring my tree down.
    I swayed with it back and forth and
    holding on still
    not even saying a word.
    Until, I was brought back
    to the ground.
    The worst part of it all
    is that
    I don't know who it was.




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