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    dots Submission Name: A dissertation of the heartdots

    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 641
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       Oh God i'm sorry i ever wrote this.

    Don't take it too seriously, my heart doesn't really know what it wants.

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    dotsA dissertation of the heartdots

    How could I
    Have been so blind
    Forget all the hate
    Forget all the time
    Very ordinary
    Yet i don't care
    Somethings missing

    Pain and heartache
    Empty chest
    I thought my heart was beating
    But it hasn't once since
    Simple nothings
    Do not compare
    A simple answer
    Life isn't fair

    And yet i cannot forget you
    Although i pray i never
    Am selfish enough to take you back
    Because to reinsert myself into your life
    Is to put you at the mercy
    Of my cold, unfeeling heart

    Do you see what time trying to say?
    This isn't a poem
    And i meant it that way.
    This is a plea
    For you to speak your mind.
    Do you feel similar?
    Or am i really that blind?

    Submitted on 2010-10-12 16:26:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I hope, despite the fact that you did not want this to be taken seriously, that you will allow me to comment. I am doing so because it is hard to come across a poem that makes for an easy read, but is also not overly dramatic. This poem achieves its purpose of describing the writer's turmoil without sacrificing a nice easy flow from line to line, and I was really enjoying myself because of that steady rhythm. This is truly a poem that anyone can realate to, and despite some over-used words here and there, I really liked it!

    Good job!
    | Posted on 2011-05-26 00:00:00 | by Anneboleyn707 | [ Reply to This ]

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