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    dots Submission Name: dead endsdots
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    Author: chiderpop
    Elite Ratio:    0.97 - 0/0/13
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
       about a friend of mine


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    dotsdead endsdots
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    Flame licks a spoon
    The shot is drawn
    Veins open wide
    The pain is gone

    Puddle of Joy
    Gone to soon
    Light a candle
    Grab a spoon

    A fist is clenched
    The worm is found
    Jump in a puddle
    Try to drown

    Bliss is over
    A loss of hope
    Find one more fix
    At the end of a rope




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