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    dots Submission Name: speedingdots
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    Author: chiderpop
    Elite Ratio:    0.97 - 0/0/13
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsspeedingdots
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    the ride was fun

    and it was fast

    but we all thought

    it would last



    i payed for the gas

    and pumped as well

    i saw the signs

    we were headed to hell



    i wanted to stop

    but i enjoyed the ride

    they said it'd be fun

    and they hadn't lied



    itll be great

    we said with a smile

    we wont get to hell

    for quite a while



    in the end

    i felt cheated

    i had supplies

    but nothing i needed



    now my heart is hate

    and i am all that i loath

    looking back now

    i should have drove




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