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Submission Name:
speeding
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Author:
chiderpop
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141
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Poetry/Depressed
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speeding
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the ride was fun
and it was fast
but we all thought
it would last
i payed for the gas
and pumped as well
i saw the signs
we were headed to hell
i wanted to stop
but i enjoyed the ride
they said it'd be fun
and they hadn't lied
itll be great
we said with a smile
we wont get to hell
for quite a while
in the end
i felt cheated
i had supplies
but nothing i needed
now my heart is hate
and i am all that i loath
looking back now
i should have drove
Submitted on 2010-10-12 20:28:52
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