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    Author: chiderpop
    Elite Ratio:    0.97 - 0/0/13
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
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    six stories up

    fifth window from the right

    it began to happen

    in the middle of the night



    i burst through the door

    and began to shout

    pissed off and coked up

    i threw the bitch out



    shiny raindrops fell

    as the night broke with a shatter

    six stories down

    the bitch broke with a splatter



    people started to yell

    as the sirens began to ring

    i just sat on my couch

    like i didnt know a thing



    through the broken window

    i heard a little alarm

    come out with your hands up

    and we wont cause any harm



    please officer you dont understand

    im innocent enough

    tell it to the judge

    as they put my hand into a cuff



    well all this pavement

    i must admit is gettin to me

    i just wanted to plant the bitch

    see if shed grow into a tree



    they tighten the straps

    as i just sit and stare

    her family looks for remorse

    sorry it just aint there



    gotta check the exchange rate

    i just dont think its fair

    who woulda known one bitch

    is worth the electric chair






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