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    dots Submission Name: what were we made for?dots
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    Author: maquiladora
    ASL Info:    30/m/nj
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 420/302/60
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotswhat were we made for?dots
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    in all this surrounding darkness
    there is one thing that shines through
    and that is my love,
    my love for you.

    i imagine that we were made
    in the same place;
    two hearts beating as one
    even before life took breath.

    i imagine that we were made for...

    i cannot carry this life
    i cannot carry this on my own
    but your love gives me strength to overcome anything.

    i imagine that we were born on the same day;
    two souls a thousand miles apart
    but together in mind.

    i imagine that we were born for....

    i cannot breathe this air
    i cannot breathe on my own
    without your scent floating through the air.

    i imagine that we died in the same way;
    two bodies, side by side,
    lips locked in an eternal embrace.

    i imagine that we died for....

    i cannot live on my own
    i cannot walk this path all alone; without you by my side,
    your fingers intertwined with mine.

    i imagine that we were made...
    i imagine that we were born...
    i imagine that we had died...

    ...for...




    Submitted on 2010-10-13 19:14:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a very different poem that I have read about love. I thought at first this was going to be about what the human race was made for lol... This was actually really good new view on love :) For me anyways! Loved it :) Good job!
    | Posted on 2010-10-15 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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