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    dots Submission Name: stemdots
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    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1556/457/118
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
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    Description:
       more feelings than thoughts


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    blatent discord surrounds
    public nervous announcements
    ingested out of habbit
    frought someone else's porn
    tantil teazer trons on a screen

    whose benefit systemic poison
    delivered via air and root
    milk to a making
    dark out of light

    gobbler of grief
    how sits your waking
    whose life you taking

    stem fellows
    lie

    die




    Submitted on 2010-10-15 17:13:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The previous readers have mentioned the obvious points of intrusion from marketing and advertising in to our daily lives. I just feel curious to where you were and what you saw that caused this piece. It seems as if the feelings are there and it would be great to share in that instance as if I were also there. its Good work in a dark writing style.

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    | Posted on 2011-12-02 00:00:00 | by ibelikeso | [ Reply to This ]
      our lives are taken over by commercialism...and we can do nothing about it..constant interruptions in our programs...and we are at their mercy..
    saw other things here too..

    public service announcements that alert us to more bad things to make us worry..

    and commercials for these medicines that say they will cure one thing but the risks' list last 58 of the 60 seconds of the commercial..

    we have so much propaganda...what can we really believe...

    good rant...
    | Posted on 2011-03-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Not fun to read. I think it relates to war and propaganda. It may refer to those who benefit from
    war. the root of all evil. Follow the money.
    Mad religious zealots would not be nearly so dangerous if they was broke.

    | Posted on 2010-11-29 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting rant, Lloyd.

    It made me think of commercials. Selling, blaring, provoking, and irritating from every corner of life, and in any form available.
    They have friggin' commercials blaring out of the end-aisle displays at walmart, for cryin out loud. Also, video screens at the gas pump displaying the joy of adding chemicals to your gas to improve the life of your vehicle and make the world a better place.

    I walked past a display of clairol hair color the other day and it shouted "Gray hair?!!!!" and I jumped as though caught in a felonious act.
    How the hell did it know I have gray hair, anyhow?

    The advertising profession is the modern equivalent of the money changers in the temple. Damned; the whole lot of them.

    In my humble opinion. ;)

    | Posted on 2010-10-16 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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