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    dots Submission Name: The Other Sidedots
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    Author: nicodemous
    ASL Info:    7-5-82/M/Hell
    Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 283/221/121
    Words: 422
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Other Sidedots
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    I cry out,
    “There is no way across the lonely water; Lord, give me a stone!”
    In time many appear before me and I have to wonder,
    “Which stone is the right one for me to use?”
    And in my moment of indecision everlasting,
    The stones are washed away by the current of time,
    Of which I try to claim too much,
    “What is one to do!?!”
    Use them all or none,
    “Find the right one.”
    I shall forever wonder what is on the other side





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    I honestly like this. It was short and simple, but wrought with meaning. Plus, you mention the Lord without shoving anything religious down anyone's throat- that's a definite plus.

    This is a piece I think many people can relate to. Frozen in that decision on what path to take, or what stone to use, but waiting too long and all the opportunities pass. Sometimes there's a time for sitting back and wondering what's on the other shore, and sometimes there's a time to act- otherwise, you'll never truly know.

    This feels original to me, and I appreciate it. Please keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2013-05-24 00:00:00 | by KotaNashi | [ Reply to This ]


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