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    dots Submission Name: ...through the night.dots
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    Author: Lelik
    ASL Info:    40/M/Jhb - South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 1194/986/192
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 694
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1478



    Description:
       Love has only one logical conclusion...unbearable sorrow. It doesn't mean that it isn't worth loving though. How many days filled with meaning I've had.


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    dots...through the night.dots
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    Well, I got through the night, somehow,
    Crawled into bed and just lay there crying;
    "My God, despite the hurt, I still love him more each day.
    I'm thankful for each day you allowed."
    The Stab I feel would have no bleeding or dying,
    But merciful exhaustion allowed me to slip away

    into a sleep of sorts where I dreamt of losing you.
    I woke to a bitter sob, half in and half out
    of a sleep that would not let me rest.
    The clock had barely moved. I knew
    without a shadow of a doubt
    the dream would stand the daybreak test.

    The oneness that I held so dear was not
    what had kept you near so long.
    For long you had been so very far away
    though closer than "X marks the spot".
    And I had known that I could not be strong
    when the time would come for you to say;

    "This is not really what I want or am,
    - the game is over.
    I love you but it wasn't for ever, damn
    - the game is over.
    Get up, get up, get up
    and go home,
    the game is over."

    I'd like to know, now where is that?
    I made my home here in your heart.
    And you may not even want to know,
    but this is still all of where I'm at
    though letting go, as the day starts
    just go - while my bitter
    tears still flow.




    Submitted on 2010-10-17 05:02:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
       so,
    you say that you are back and suitably depressed to write bad poetry again... :-(

    we say. hurrah!
    not for your current pain, but because of the edge that pain is giving to your already exceptional voice. and goodness, anyone reading this will be feeling that pain right now.

    i share your philosophy about love. but it does not make the pain any easier, does it? and, for the record, neither does the stiff upper lip .

    j

    (genuinely pleased that you are back here!)
    | Posted on 2010-10-22 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      You're alive!
    | Posted on 2010-10-17 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      For real? You're alive?
    | Posted on 2010-10-17 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]


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