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    dots Submission Name: The 14thdots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    16/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 14/83/123
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe 14thdots
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    A break for the broken and a smile for the breathless hun you got me wondering if you're worthless.

    To feel so distant
    breathless in your arms

    I felt a stir
    a small light that was glowing
    sparked and caught fire
    I smiled for a second and drowned it in my tears
    my fears-of you

    trapped here in arms
    not ones I love
    not ones I trust

    Frozen from the falling snow-you kissed me
    And I was colder than the ice under our feet





    Submitted on 2010-10-17 22:23:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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