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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    16/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 14/83/123
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    You had my heart racing every morning
    was it the coffee?
    I'm not sure
    I felt bad for not doing anything about it
    her heart was at stake too
    I partially hate you
    You hurt her
    and she didn't deserve it
    I think you liked the attention
    all the same I miss you
    I made you laugh and though you always hid it
    I could see a smile still shining in those brown eyes




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