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    dots Submission Name: The 13thdots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    16/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 14/83/123
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe 13thdots
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    We were only together for a blink of an eye
    but I'll remember you till the day I die
    You were such a sweetheart
    Our lines of communication were wrong
    With you wasn't where I should belong
    I hope you find all of life's joys
    and no more of it's pain
    I'm sorry you went through what you did
    I couldn't imagine how you stayed sane

    Not sure if we're still friends
    I didn't want to manipulate you
    I wasn't trying to bend you in half
    I wanted you to see the sun light and forget about the past




    Submitted on 2010-10-17 23:35:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi today must be life day
    this is the 3rd piece i read today i like the story line i at one time in my life was each one of those people and its funny even stuf happened 30 years ago for some will still burn there butt and for others they go on alwaz wondering

    well done

    sandman
    | Posted on 2010-10-19 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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