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    dots Submission Name: S.O.S (Global Suicide)dots
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    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Prose/Society
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    Description:
       The Seventies were a good era... they had good music, anyway.
    This is about the world kinda dying, turning to technology, and no longer accepting human flaws. What happened? :[
    Any comments/thoughts (positive or negative) welcome :]


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    Maybe I was meant to born in the Seventies
    When life was carefree & crazy
    Where having a great time was writ large

    But instead, born on the brink of the Digital Age
    A child of Global Suicide
    God knew we were killing ourselves

    Maybe life on this planet here isn't so bad
    Just stuck upon this dying world
    How will we erase our mistakes?

    Technology will now steer the fate of this planet
    And we don't know where we're going
    If only we could call out "S.O.S"

    In the end we will defeat ourselves..




    Submitted on 2010-10-18 04:18:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was 20 in the seventies and although the music was good and there was still lots of love and peace to go around from the sixties we had Viet Nam . Every generation has their own set of problems . Try to imagine life without computers and cell phones . That's the seventies . Now we are having this conversation as it was not possible in my era . We may be strangers on the bus , but we now have a new tool and even are own website . Communication is blossoming like it was never before possible . Maybe we will yet be able to talk our way out of the futurity you envision . It can't all be useless tweet . The internet may become the greatest thing this planet has ever seen , and maybe able to bring about significant geo political and social change . Take hope !

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2010-10-29 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel indifferent about this.First...I like the fact that you chose to write about this type of thing as far as technology today and the way ppl treat each other in this world which really is not human when it comes to the opressor.The 70's is just basically saying how cool you think the decade really is because that's what I thought and I CAN PARTIALLY AGREE.I feel that way about the 80's.The times change.Technology, man has already abused that for many examples.You make me think about so many things that run through my head which makes me take my time on to share thoughts.P rivacy is something that fades more and more every single day in this world that we live in that is an illusion bc of technology.Advertisements promote conceited need from the person desires such as the lastest cellphone, HP laptop, Bugotti and all these other things that really have no value and those ppl who let these things take over their mind are the one who actually suffer from their lifestyles all bc of T.You make a very strong point here.The 70's also makes me think of how technology really did not play a mega role on the world stage yet and that is another thing you were getting at here so I think this is paint a cruel world with a question mark under the moon with all kinds of versions of techno pretty much showing the dangers that make us addicted to it as human beings.Just ask the socialites and the addicted Twitterers.

    Nice write.There should be more comments.You tackle a strong subject.

    RG
    | Posted on 2010-10-18 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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