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    dots Submission Name: I pray to youdots
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    Author: angelagresham19
    ASL Info:    18-Female Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    0.61 - 66/32/42
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 561
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 394



    Description:
       this happan inreal left of mine


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    dotsI pray to youdots
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    i remamber when you were sick
    in the hostpitle
    i knew that you were going to past away
    i was laying down on a bed next to you
    sleeping when the the dothers comes in and gave you morpine and they walk out that when i know you only a few breaths to takes i got up to pray with you on your last breath when i was done you said i love you
    then you past away




    Submitted on 2010-10-18 12:39:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very powerfull and emotive, sad and evocative.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2010-11-04 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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