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    dots Submission Name: Warmthdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 230/393/145
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 748
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 346



    Description:
       Hydrangeas being used here with the flower meaning of 'frigidity.'
    Hell yes, having some fun with dorsal-palatal alliteration. Phonetics play = the best kind of play.


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    dotsWarmthdots
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    It all comes down to the rain
    on the hydrangeas. The garden
    tiger starves to death. It is all bones,
    discontent, tiger.

    They cover the remains and it
    remains a tiger. Beneath the wet
    blue ache, it remains.

    The immortality of tigers
    again and again
    unearths my heart.




    Submitted on 2010-10-18 22:44:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hm... I really like this. I always loved those flowers. I got them in my garden at home but I never knew their name. It seems I learn something with each one of your poems. So I'm off to reading more...
    | Posted on 2011-07-08 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written indeed. Your description is vivid and sets a real picture in the mind.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2010-11-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful.

    Absolutely no changes recommended.

    Wonderfully, blessedly beautiful.

    --Jane

    P.S. Yes, I did enjoy the remain/remains bit. :)
    | Posted on 2010-10-24 00:00:00 | by WhatYouWill | [ Reply to This ]


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