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    dots Submission Name: A lonely October Nightdots

    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA lonely October Nightdots

    I have greeted loneliness,
    In an October night
    At the threshold of a silent hour,
    Like a rabid dog;
    Waiting for Gabriel,
    To claim all the green, red, and golden leaves
    Along with the ailing spring promises,

    So that the rapt moon shall rest awhile
    Over the throne of the great Pipal trees.

    Submitted on 2010-10-20 16:18:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      just a little says a lot...very descriptive in what is said and what we can imagine...

    the moon is listening with rabid attention...and it is resting...

    and spring is coming...but first we have to disappear, so that we may be born again.

    | Posted on 2011-04-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      hi thanx for the comment on wildflower i may take you up on adding some images to it
    it was just a thot i got while reading something so i made it basic i havnt written a good love story in years

    i like your piece sometime a short and simple poem captures more than something to long
    kinda like wild flower
    october is the best time of the year i think great write

    thanx again
    | Posted on 2011-02-03 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. Short but meaningful and rich. Thank you for sharing. Me likey..
    | Posted on 2010-10-24 00:00:00 | by Midnight_Toker | [ Reply to This ]

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