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    dots Submission Name: Fallingdots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.3333
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    dotsFallingdots
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    This silence here
    You hear it too

    That low hum of engines
    Out on dreary streets
    Little drums that roll for ages
    In ears

    When whispers never let you sleep
    The whispering truths
    And full hearted memories
    Sinking constantly deeper
    And deeper into venomous dreams

    What happens before we sleep?
    That moment when the body lays
    Unaware of any influence

    Red or green or any colours that seem
    To form some terrible shape,
    These days I wonder;
    Is that pain? Or is this dream?





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      This silence here
    You hear it too

    That low hum of engines
    Out on dreary streets
    Little drums that roll for ages
    In ears

    When whispers never let you sleep
    The whispering truths
    And full hearted memories
    Sinking constantly deeper

    What happens before we sleep?
    That moment when the body lays
    Unaware of any influence
    | Posted on 2010-10-27 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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