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Insomnia


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 77
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Insomnia



i wade deeper into the depths-

heavy hearted in heavy water,

each wave is tied to my soul under no duress

the lock and key are beyond my stretch.

gently it pulls.

it sweeps me in,

till it covers my head.

without an inch of panic,

i'm drenched and soaked.

loved and owned.

covered black and blue.

with a love i never knew.




Submitted on 2010-10-26 04:07:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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