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    dots Submission Name: The day you walkeddots
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    Author: Bloodlust86
    ASL Info:    24/F/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 56/49/53
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe day you walkeddots
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    I watched you walk out of my life,I did not shed a single tear the whole time you were packing and walking out the door, I wanted to, my heart was breaking in two, You turned to me and said you were sorry we were not able to make things work and left.

    Now I lay in bed tears streaking down my face and blood running down my arm. I promised you I would never cut again, But you promised you would never leave. You broke your promise so I broke mine. The blade slid across my skin in a smooth motion and it felt like a relief.

    The sheets are stained when I wake up the smell of blood is still in the air. I get up off the bed and wash my arm off and go face the world without you in it.




    Submitted on 2010-10-27 01:12:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow!!!such detail so much pain. I love this poem its so emotional it made me honestly cry.I look forward 2hearing your poetry. This poem connected with my situtation just amazing.
    | Posted on 2010-11-01 00:00:00 | by childoftears | [ Reply to This ]


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