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Black Ink Poetry


Author: clovernfoxglove
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A poem about my poetry :)


Black Ink Poetry



I write Black Ink Poetry
with beautiful bonfire melodies.
jumping jazz rifts and half-breath,
half notes.

I write Black Ink Poetry
on paper planes
and fly them on windy march days
in the smiling spring sun
beneath the clouds and kites.

I write Black Ink Poetry
and set them to sail in blue bottle boats
to travel the across the oceans of the sky
to other worlds and universes.

I write Black Ink Poetry
about you and I.




Submitted on 2010-10-28 08:28:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Black ink poetry to me means that every word is intended.
All the mediums you mention to send your ideas are rather unconventional.

And yet, the words you say, I love you, are meant in every way.

I enjoyed this very much, really beautiful!

Love,

Nan
| Posted on 2011-06-19 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the child-delight of this poem. I love the descriptions and the transcendances (spelled that way because the dance away) you've put into this piece.

I could never write in black ink, only blue... I guess black words in blue inks. When I should try to write blue words with black ink sometimes and mix it up.

Amazing work in this one, truly truly.
| Posted on 2010-11-08 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
  rocking sounds and phrasing.
| Posted on 2010-10-28 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
  I never, ever see poems about "windy march days," and kites, and blue bottle boats. Remarkably unique and irresistably whimsical. I love the alliteration...the words melted like chocolate in my mouth. Lovely...just lovely.
Thanks for sharing!
~Kim~
| Posted on 2010-10-28 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]
  i love the way this is so self professing. it's like a melody that describes itself with it's own melody. being a fellow poet i enjoy seeing people who still find simple joy in it. with out that there is no purpose. well no real benefit. or pleasurable one at least. well i'm not gonna go fully into that.

technically i don't like the format of the third stanza. having the third line stand out like that is quite the eye soar. now maybe you could bring it down like this.

to travel the across the oceans of the sky
to other worlds and universes.

this still keeps the other worlds and universes linked in a direct pragmatic and proximal sense, and keeps the lines more symmetrically aligned. variance is good. but as far as i'm concerned idk, that line just quirks me, but i'm fairly eccentric and picky about formatting. either way it's a fav. just for the subject matter, and that the words were executed well.
| Posted on 2010-10-28 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
  this is good. I really liked the use of alliteration. Nicely thought out. I have nothing to add. Excellent work.


Fizz
| Posted on 2010-10-28 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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