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    dots Submission Name: What's Another Yeardots
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    Author: shatila
    ASL Info:    17/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 68/63/16
    Words: 295
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 1232
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1946



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       What i wrote is what I got. or dont got:(


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    dotsWhat's Another Yeardots
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    When the 3rd gen iPod Touch came out
    Everyone wanted it
    I wanted it
    But I said to myself
    Wait one more year, kid
    And I swear the money you spend
    Will have more and more value
    All in good time


    After a year and
    the release of the new iPod Touch (with camera)
    I'm still holding on to my money
    Why?
    0.7 megapixels in an age of 12 MPs
    Nope, not worth it
    So, I easily wait
    What's another year.. right?

    When the Nokia n900 came out
    Everyone wanted it
    I wanted it
    But I said to myself
    Wait one more year, kid.
    And I swear the money you spend
    Will have more and more value
    All in good time


    After a year and
    the n900's 45% price drop
    I'm still holding on to my money
    Why?
    256 MB of RAM in an age of 500 MB and higher
    Nope, not worth it
    So, I easily wait
    What's another year.. right?

    When the season of romance came out
    Everyone wanted it
    I wanted it
    But i said to myself
    Wait one more year, kid
    And I swear the love you've always felt
    Will have more and more value
    All in good time


    After a year and
    Your unfailing ability to make me laugh and feel special
    I'm still holding on to my heart
    Why?
    True love at an age of early twenties and soul-searching
    Nope, not worth it
    So, I easily wait
    What's another year.. right?

    Well, at the rate I'm going
    A decade will have to pass
    before I shall have my answer

    Most probably in the liquid form
    of pure, undiluted regret.




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      whats another decade?

    when there will be the iPatch
    take it outta the box
    and peel it back
    apply to left buttocks-

    all songs ever recorded
    all videos ever shot
    all photos ever taken
    all books ever written

    will be implanted into the 70 kilogram fatty collection of protein between the ears.

    all in good time kid....

    whats another decade?

    when there will be Happyoxillythemine
    perfectly legal
    over-the-counter
    suppository

    FDA approved and proven to:

    alleviate existential weight on shoulders
    induce enlightenment
    reduce solipsism
    and make "happy" happen*

    but all in good time kid...




































































































































































    *side effects may include undiluted regret and guilty conscience. not safe for children below 12 years of age.
    | Posted on 2011-06-28 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      this is actually quite brilliant! at first i thought it was just a quirky little quibble literally about an ipod. the element of surprise was nice. i pretty much second everything else said about this. regardless of who this is about maybe just show it to them*unless it's not a literal he/she* maybe they'll buy you an ipod?
    | Posted on 2010-10-29 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      I must come right out and say: I like this! It reminds me of this comic I read on The Oatmeal called: "What It's Like To Own An Apple Product" or something. It depicts some guy who goes and buys a product called iPride and loves it. Then the new iPride comes out and he goes broke, can't buy it and goes into a downward spiral. Until someone donates the new iPride to him! And then walking past a TV shop the news announcer proclaims how the new new iPride is out and then begin downward spiral all over again. -ANYWAY-
    Good on you for holding onto your money for the technological part, it's always going to improve and no one can ever win. -_-
    The season of romance... this part is really cool. I like how you're saving like, everything up for something that will be totally worth it in the end.
    This piece shows that you aren't buckled by peer pressure! So good for you on that part :D
    But also the last part... it really changes perspective on this piece. Like you're completely playing it safe and that one day you'll think, "oh my goodness, why didn't I??"
    So maybe the moral of this story is to play it safe, but not too safe?
    Either way, I still really like this and it is an amazing write!
    Thank you so much! :]
    ~
    | Posted on 2010-10-29 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]
      Very enjoyable read. I thought it interesting that you listed it under Random Thoughts/Misc. To me that is the sign of someone who pays attention to detail. You could have listed it under poetry but you probably thought "no that's not entirely right..."

    The piece itself really gives us an inside look at someone who holds out sometimes to the point of torture.

    Only someone who pays such attention to detail, who counts every penny and parts with each almost painfully could write such an honest piece of work. You show us the reasoning and the self-doubt.

    Well done. I enjoyed this piece.


    Fizz
    | Posted on 2010-10-28 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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