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    dots Submission Name: The depthsdots
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    Author: concrete_rose
    ASL Info:    31/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 43/52/34
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 506
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    Description:
       I need some feedback on this good or bad maybe a little help on word play
    thx
    just a very quick write 5 mins tops!!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe depthsdots
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    Discovering the truth about ones self
    Can almost always be exhilarating, surprising, interesting
    The promise of a brighter future equals happiness
    Realizing the self is strong and powerful:
    Against the evils of this world
    There is no greater knowledge

    To once be drowning in the sea of miseries,
    And then pleasantly washed upon the sands of recognition
    The realization that there isn’t need for uncalled for desperation
    There are many chances
    We are all worth something to a greater power extending our own selves.

    We all must reach down into our bosoms
    And claw away our own insanities that drive us mad
    And cause us to spiral away from the sun
    And lift ourselves up into the skies the clear blue apparatus
    Cleanse our failures and be wiped clean to start again.

    10/28/10




    Submitted on 2010-10-28 23:50:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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