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    dots Submission Name: Leaves Ridding Eddiesdots
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    Author: nicodemous
    ASL Info:    7-5-82/M/Hell
    Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 283/221/121
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsLeaves Ridding Eddiesdots
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    Fickle flying winds
    Dragging desperate change in tow
    Swirling this way and that
    Then the other

    Leaves ridding eddies
    Seemingly pushed
    And pulled
    And forced
    Restrained only by guilt, kicking and screaming

    Lost bellows in shifting time
    Forgotten, silent, gliding on the hidden gales
    Soaring above our heads

    Muffled and disoriented
    Decent
    Swooping in our mists
    Providing comfortable lies with which to cling

    We look at each other
    Feigned ignorance
    As we collectively pretend to ignore the obvious
    When we all know the truth
    In the back of our minds

    And especially in our hearts




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    Turns out, you've got a talent in executing both at an ideal quantity & pace.

    I do wonder what you'd experienced so triggering. A very touching piece.
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