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    dots Submission Name: Toys for Childrendots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsToys for Childrendots
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    put it all up on a screen, divorced from all the blood, death and screaming... its just a video game, although its very real, when the bullets smack with their wet sickening thunk into the living body of ......... someone

    toys for children

    divorced from conscience
    just the playful willing robots of death dealing demons

    isn't that just awesome 3000 rounds a second

    and guts and brains and internal organs
    and wives and fathers
    sons and daughters
    splattered and dripping all over your television

    are we having fun




    Submitted on 2010-11-04 15:38:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Bravo! I always some how catch that you've written something new. I am never left down. Your work is intense and magnificent. Thank you for sharing.
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