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    dots Submission Name: Psycosisdots
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    Author: GhiHaD
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 46/64/24
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1046
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    The nighttime waterfight
    Freezing thought
    Invision forgotten emotions
    Transpoiring reality into nothing more than whispers
    Open the gate
    Open the gate to release irrelevancy from its captors
    Reasoning and logic

    Criteria unknown at first glance
    Dig deep and take your stance
    Tonight may be your only chance
    Read the pages in a psychotic trance

    Washing away sins in a bath of blood
    Dim lights flicker, finally cutting to an end
    Darkness
    Stained crimson
    Wash away your sins
    Are you able to cleanse yourself?
    Staind forever
    Staind together




    Submitted on 2004-07-26 22:48:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the idea of cleansing sins with blood is usually a biblical idea and yet here it would seem anything but... it is very powerful.
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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