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    dots Submission Name: I think she's dyingdots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI think she's dyingdots
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    She keeps on knocking
    asking to see the monster.
    I keep on smiling,
    Telling her he's not here.

    Ideas, projected over me
    dance my soul to shards.
    Seems I cannot exist free
    from your looking glass...

    The paint grows weary
    holding my knotted bones.
    What is this dark theory?
    This destroyer of homes..

    Every day this spinning
    gently pulling me apart
    encourages the draining
    from some forgotten part.

    What is a heart?

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2010-11-07 07:48:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The heart...
    It's funny that all our consciousness, connections and links with humanity are with the Brain, our thoughts and our poems and words and I Love You's generate there, but the Heart is what people ask for in a relationship... I want your Heart. I want your Heart.

    We can exist brain-dead, continue breathing and functioning with minimum pieces, but with even slightest damage to the Heart, we cease existing.

    So what does a lover ask for? The one thing we need to keep the most protected.

    | Posted on 2010-11-09 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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