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    dots Submission Name: From the woman you haven't metdots
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    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 354
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 459
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       to my mama


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    dotsFrom the woman you haven't metdots
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    From the women you'll never know
    By Hilary Coury
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    I have aged since you last knew me.
    Almost six long years ago.
    Before I became this woman,
    the one you will never know.

    I have moved around,
    bouncing from here to there.
    Always silently searching,
    for a sign of you somewhere.

    Sometimes I actually find one.
    But only as a flat reflection in a mirror.
    Imitating only cold shallow glimpses,
    this is the way I find you here.

    A reflection of your beauty.
    A twin to your pain.
    A duplicate of your depression,
    and a source for the shame.

    I have aged since you last knew me.
    Almost six long years ago.
    Before I became this woman,
    the one you will never know.

    I wish you could see me,
    being here to hold my hand.
    Leading me on my way,
    and full-filling all our plans.

    You aren't here to help me,
    or council me when I cry.
    You wont watch me walk down an isle,
    or bring my own children into the world.

    You'll never know this woman,
    the one which I have become.
    The one you helped inspire,
    when my heart was still happy and young.

    I have aged since you last knew me.
    Almost six long years ago.
    Before I became this woman,
    the one you will never know.

    But for now I feel so lost.
    Simply unleashed upon the world.
    misguided in my choices.
    A lonely death struck little girl.

    I'm longing for your opinion.
    Needing your suggestions.
    Alone in my decisions,
    and stuck without progression.

    I miss my hippie mama,
    and the way you touched my life.
    But I know it's you inside me,
    fueling my will to fight.

    I have aged since you last knew me.
    Almost six long years ago.
    Before I became this woman,
    the one you will never know.

    But still, maybe in the end,
    you'll be able to find me.
    Recognizing the girl you once knew.
    and living right beside me,
    the way you were always meant to.




    Submitted on 2010-11-08 06:14:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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