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Winters Clarity

Author: girly101
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Winters Clarity

My head aches with the stress of days accumulated
the anxiety threatening to overwhelm

But the ice cold air sears through the pain
a clarity only winter can bring

My tense muscles breathe in the chilled air
and relax under its frozen fingertips

My thoughts slow and each second
seems to be endless in this barren wonderland

Naked trees stand against the harsh dark sky
but a diamond embedded powder of white sparkles beneath my feet

Two beauties are at play here
on this chilled night

One of fragile innocence
and gentle touches

One of loss and pain
as Mother Earths creations wilt away

Submitted on 2010-11-08 12:59:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love the imagery you used here to describe those icy nights that hold so much more. Short but strong. Good piece I look forward to reading more from you. If you get a chance check out mine would love feedback and going to check more of yours now.
| Posted on 2010-11-09 00:00:00 | by Thornful Rose | [ Reply to This ]

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