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    dots Submission Name: Winters Claritydots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWinters Claritydots
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    My head aches with the stress of days accumulated
    the anxiety threatening to overwhelm

    But the ice cold air sears through the pain
    a clarity only winter can bring

    My tense muscles breathe in the chilled air
    and relax under its frozen fingertips

    My thoughts slow and each second
    seems to be endless in this barren wonderland

    Naked trees stand against the harsh dark sky
    but a diamond embedded powder of white sparkles beneath my feet

    Two beauties are at play here
    on this chilled night

    One of fragile innocence
    and gentle touches

    One of loss and pain
    as Mother Earths creations wilt away




    Submitted on 2010-11-08 12:59:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the imagery you used here to describe those icy nights that hold so much more. Short but strong. Good piece I look forward to reading more from you. If you get a chance check out mine would love feedback and going to check more of yours now.
    | Posted on 2010-11-09 00:00:00 | by Thornful Rose | [ Reply to This ]


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