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    dots Submission Name: Fool's Gamedots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 448
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1853



    Description:
       By the way... this is a song but I didn't see that in the categories.

    I wrote this today in a bout 15 minutes. Also sang it.


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    dotsFool's Gamedots
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    There's a crack in the wall beside my bed
    Where it's been for some... many years
    'N there's a voice whispering inside my head
    sometimes I drink, to calm my tears

    Some think I have lost my mind
    Left it there... somewhere on the floor
    If they borrowed my eyes then they might find
    The truth foretold... from beyond that door

    And I know
    That my whole world is busy hurtin'
    Well don't go
    When you come back, it'll be worth it

    Well some say
    That I been playin' a fool's game
    But all day
    I still long for you the same

    There's a lack of comfort in this place
    Regretful sins... that die alone
    There's a lonely gloom in this race
    Talking to myself... while on the phone

    Some they try to forget the times
    Burn the pictures and... fade their thoughts to sand
    But that lacks reason and all rymes
    I'll turn the page again.. though alone I stand

    And I know
    That my whole world is busy hurtin'
    Well don't go
    If you come back, it'll be worth it

    Well some say
    That I been playin' a fool's game
    But all day
    I still long for you the same

    Well I know
    That my whole world is busy hurtin'
    Please don't go
    Will you come back, it'll be worth it

    I know that some say
    That I been playin' a fool's game
    But all day
    I can't help but all day
    I know I'm gonna still long for you all the same

    Another crack's in the wall beside my bed
    Lost my composure when... I dreamt I died again...




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