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    dots Submission Name: she smileddots

    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 413
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsshe smileddots

    she smiled
    and said, you'll always be my angel
    and with her last breath
    her tears were dry
    and I was by her side
    I held on for as long as I could
    but still it doesn't seem like it was long enough
    and not a day goes by
    that I wish I had those moments back
    and I know shes looking down on me
    and I want to make her proud
    cause sometimes my mistakes feel like daggers in my heart
    but I know what she would say
    take it slow, take it easy
    life is not a race
    slow down my baby
    and learn to move with grace
    its the memories that get me through the days
    but the years, well love when I figure that out
    you'll be the first to know.

    Submitted on 2010-11-09 14:50:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very Very Well Written
    | Posted on 2011-01-25 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]
      Memories are to be cherrished for ever....especially the ones that involve those closest to us. This was a lovely and very heartfelt write.

    Very well written.

    | Posted on 2010-12-26 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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