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    dots Submission Name: There is no bliss in ignorancedots

    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThere is no bliss in ignorancedots

    This storm over my roof
    Is a fast moving beast, the gutters spill splashes.
    Its black mass scatters fragments of trees
    Whirlwinds of leaves, golden hearts in winter
    Sloppy and shoveled into gurgling gutters
    Into then, into then one foliage piece
    To side-of-the-road and kick about the feet.

    In some gap of window I know unseen
    The wind is rowing and deepening in
    I hear the screams of dozens of people;
    Sixteen drowning souls of St. Lucia kicking
    For a gulp of air or some prolonged existence
    Down in the mud of the fast flowing earth
    I hear the squelching flowing dead in my ear.

    So overhead now is Thomas’s tail whipping
    Across my country; this morning we raced from the west
    In hopes of beating it before it had its best
    When we rose, with the sun, it was clear and silent.
    I even spied a wild hare leap through its track;
    It shook off the dewy beads of sleep
    That gathered in those fields and in my vision
    Hazy, blurred, cold bed ridden, heavy lidded
    Out green window into open fields, alone
    There is a single standing hawthorn tree

    And tell me, what should I choose to know?
    The mud? The dead? The screaming souls?

    The sprinting hare whisping through the open field?
    That lonely old hawthorn tree and all its standing years?
    Yes I simply do, because I must believe.
    I must believe in what I see in front of me.

    Submitted on 2010-11-10 18:29:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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