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    dots Submission Name: Love sine die – Part 1/ndots
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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsLove sine die – Part 1/ndots
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    The first day, the first sight, the very first feeling of delight
    That day did fly by, with answers all high, till that time there wasn't I
    And in that spur, when I took over, and gave that sole answer
    Did lie the magic of that very first clash with her eye, that very high

    But hark it wasn't supposed to be a companionship beginning in that spree
    When she was called to leave my view and disappear to section three
    Something was left as she departed without even a 'Hi'
    On that very first day that still comes by

    He appeared to be her true friend and more than that a little fiend
    Albeit having ambitions high and perseverance levels wry
    For it was the dream which he pursued unknowingly high
    Little did he know the consequences of his first cry

    It took sometime and he did blend along with one hell of a gem
    Whose memories will never ever be tarnished till I die
    Well that's to another time and coming back to the true friend inline
    Brings back images of the introduction with Ms. Fine




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