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    dots Submission Name: Drop the balldots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 517
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    dotsDrop the balldots
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    Let me fling it back at you,
    In all its wonderful dramatic confusion -
    Like the surging shimmering tide of
    First butterflies,
    Perplexed and drunk and paralyzed
    From their new last self,
    And passing on -

    To catch the hummingbirds in between
    Your noble fingers, one palm up - one down -
    Like the spinning white dervish;
    Face crucified and bloodless
    In savage concentration,
    And two black veins
    Of universe,
    Ousting my each and every fear.




    Submitted on 2010-11-14 15:40:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was utterly--totally heartfelt and beautiful to me.

    I suppose I should be more constructive--- but I am recently reborn at this site--I like this --a whole lot and I don't see a need to belabor the point!----Silver
    | Posted on 2010-11-16 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this an absolutely beautiful exchange. good for the two of you, both very talented as well.
    | Posted on 2010-11-15 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      (.:picking up the ball:.)

    verses of the roses
    letters like flower leaves

    sweet scent from every line
    to the intoxication of the night

    this mysterious roof up in the sky
    created on day one to please your eye

    full of stars and moon and signs
    all turning around your smiles

    and upon its surges soothing allies
    two worlds immerse in rapture alike

    | Posted on 2010-11-14 00:00:00 | by namenlos | [ Reply to This ]
      1.+2. shall go hand in hand
    3. Enthused.. Honored
    4. Because it is from you
    5. There is no divisibility for the perceiving organ
    6. The inner picture of the author (in a positive sense)
    7. The english vocabs that I did not know before ;)
    8. The cosmic inspiration all writings might come from
    9. By being layed down in paper or papyrus or into clay tablets ;)
    10. Adding the CET time (but generally time/space ought not to matter too much)
    11. Hide it better in case it was not ment to be found ;)
    12. Aber nat�rlich :)
    | Posted on 2010-11-14 00:00:00 | by namenlos | [ Reply to This ]


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