Comfy Sunday shirts

Author: TheStillSilence ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space Elite Ratio:    4.97 - 180 /113 /59 Words: 1

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Comfy Sunday shirts

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Submitted on 2010-11-14 17:20:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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once again ur at it...sigh...this is beautiful. i like how it is not spoon fed. it is quite intriguing.... "The frame is breaking . Sy- lla- bles Sy- Lla- - Bles" from my limited understanding these r directly connected yes? the frame is picturing sumthing...but i cant exactly fig out...mayb im thinkin too much "Blond hair , messy bangs . I never minded your cleft It was you- Was that just you ?" "Your slight smile, crooked angles Your soothing bite and your fickle lookover Comfy Sunday shirts and piggy glances- Too many lines , words, syllables , that aren' t you ." ive come to the conclusion that u r trying to basically say that everything you can say to tangibly describe this person fall short. and that u miss them and your thoughts and words to decribe them simply arent enough. thus correctly statin that u arent in love with the thought of bein with them. u r purely- unadulterately in love im so wrapped in this one...

| Posted on 2010-12-08 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]

At first I found this to be scattered and confusing a bit... but when i take a step back... so is art. if you have to spell it out, you've made a children's book. So in that retrospect I applaud you. Not to mention it comes together quite casually at the end... which I liked. I guess what i'm trying to say is you took the point of poetry and made it original. Not many people get that anymore. It's fun to write something that means different to different people.

| Posted on 2010-11-14 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]

At first I found this to be scattered and confusing a bit... but when i take a step back... so is art. if you have to spell it out, you've made a children's book. So in that retrospect I applaud you. Not to mention it comes together quite casually at the end... which I liked. I guess what i'm trying to say is you took the point of poetry and made it original. Not many people get that anymore. It's fun to write something that means different to different people.

| Posted on 2010-11-14 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]

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